jetski
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 | | Subject: AntiChrist's Reign; AntiChrist's Fall Sat Oct 19, 2013 3:04 pm | |
| Hope you enjoy the read. God bless. Chapter One 2016 “They’ve started building the oil pipeline from the tribe of Asher in Lebanon to the city of Tyre.”Jael looked up sleepily at her husband John Presley whom she had nicknamed Johnny boy was hovering over her with a concerned look on his face. She took a moment to gather her thoughts before replying.“I wonder how many of God’s people will understand what this means?”“By my guess, not very many.”“We fought so hard against so many giants to clear the way for God’s people, I hope it wasn’t all in vain.”“God doesn’t make mistakes Jael. What we did will have its desired effect.”“I know you’re right. It’s just that so many are still in the dark about what’s coming.”“All in God’s time, Jael.”“Yeah, I know.”“The good thing is that there are only a few years left of this madness.”“The bad thing is that it gets much worse before it gets better.”“You are becoming a pessimist in your old age Jael.”“A pessimist? Not likely, just a realist, and I’m not THAT old Johnny boy.”“No, you’re not. I apologize for the misnomer my lady.”“Apology accepted.”There was another pause as Jael again collected her thoughts.“It’s been a few years, do you think we might be called on again?”“We’ve kept in touch with the others if only sporadically. If need be, we can call on them again.”“But do you think God would actually call on us again after all we’ve already done and sacrificed?”“I think God will do what God will do. And what sacrifice have we made that could compare to His sacrifice of His Son?”“Ouch! You sure found my soft spot in a hurry.”“Why don’t we just keep an eye on things and see how it goes.”“Wisdom at its best. That’s what I love about you.”“And I love everything else about YOU!”Johnny boy leaped onto Jael and pinned her to the bed. Jael giggled as she playfully fought back without really resisting.“Are you trying to have your way with me sir?”“Only if you want me too.”“Okay sailor, but I warn you, I’m an expert with a sword,” said Jael playfully.“Yes, I do have a distant memory of your prowess.”“Only a distant memory?”“Come here you huntress of giants! Grrr.”Jael stopped resisting. She fully embraced her husband of three years and felt the strength of his love for her.I waited so long for you; but the wait was well worth it, thought Jael.Could I love you any more than I do right now, thought John Presley (Johnny boy)?I would love to give you children my husband; but what if God calls us back into the fight? God has kept us from having children so far; maybe He’s not finished with us as far as sending us into battle.Their passion flared and they embraced each other’s charms. They were caught up in their love for one another as the morning hours passed. Jael fell asleep in her husband’s arms. Johnny boy followed suit when he saw Jael was asleep.It was noon when Johnny boy awoke. He looked at Jael with amazement.You’re as beautiful as the day I married you. No, scratch that thought; you’re more beautiful now than when I married you. We’re approaching 40 fast. If God is going to use us again, He better step up the pace and quick.Jael stirred. Slowly, she opened her eyes to find Johnny boy staring at her.“Look mister, don’t you know it’s not polite to stare at a girl while she sleeps?”“Who ever said I was polite?”Jael took the pillow out from behind her head and struck Johnny boy.“Oh, so you want to play rough do you?”Johnny boy began tickling Jael.“Ha ha ha, okay, stop.”“Not until you say uncle.”“Okay! UNCLE!”“I knew I was the master of this house.”“Yes, you are master of all you see,” said Jael.“In that case, fix me some lunch woman.”Jael again picked up the pillow and struck Johnny boy.“I thought you said uncle.”“I did, but now you went too far with your ordering me around,” laughed Jael as she again struck Johnny boy.“You’re lucky I’m in love with you or you would suffer my full wrath,” joked Johnny boy.“Bring it on,” mocked Jael.“You asked for it.”Johnny boy again began to tickle Jael.“UNCLE, UNCLE, UNCLE!”“That’s what I thought. Let’s get some lunch.”“Whatever you say, master.”“Now THAT is how a woman speaks to her husband.”“Actually, THAT is how a woman keeps her husband doing what she wants him to do for her.”“Here we go again.”Johnny boy was about to start ticking Jael, when they heard a knock at their front door.“I’ll get it,” said Johnny boy.Leaving the bed, Johnny boy quickly dressed and went to the front door. He opened it and saw Captain John standing before him. In his shock, he momentarily forgot his manners and stood speechless.“Are you going to invite an old friend in or what?”“Oh, of course Captain,” said Johnny boy as he hugged Captain John.“Such formality, just call me John.”“Not going to happen Captain.”“Suit yourself, but let me out of this cold weather if you please. Even at noon, Montana isn’t a warm place.”“Come in, come in. Sit here and I’ll get Jael.”“Sorry about not calling, but I didn’t have your number. I only had your address.”“I’m amazed you found that, the others all keep in contact with us by phone, but YOU, well, that is another story.”“I have much to tell you, so get Jael and we’ll have a good chat.”“It’s really nice to see you Captain.”“Same here Johnny boy.”Captain John sat in the easy chair as Johnny boy spilled the news to Jael who quickly got dressed and accompanied him to the living room. Captain John rose and gave Jael a good strong hug, which Jael reciprocated.“After we parted, I wasn’t sure if I’d ever see you again,” said Jael.“I kind of wondered that myself. So you two finally tied the knot.”“Yeah, we held out as long as we could.”“I dodged her as long as I could.”Jael struck Johnny boy in the back.“Yup, it’s true love all right,” said Captain John.“Never a dull moment with this wildcat,” said Johnny boy.“It’s really nice to see you Captain John. To what do we owe the pleasure?”“That’s what I always liked about you Jael, straight to the point.”“Is there any other way?”“Not when you’re involved,” said Johnny boy, which quickly got him another slap on the back.“Married life suits you Johnny boy.”“If I survive it.”Again came the slap on the back.“Seriously, Captain, to what DO we owe the pleasure,” asked Johnny boy?“First let me catch you two up on what has been happening in my life since we last parted.”“We’re all ears,” said jael.“Today she’s all ears. Normally she’s all mouth.”Before he could dodge it, again came the slap on the back.“Sit down and listen to me before she knocks you out Johnny boy.”“Sounds like good advice to me,” said Jael as she gave Johnny boy a look.The two sat down on the couch and leaned forward to listen to Captain John spill the beans about his life since leaving Turkey back in 2013, a little over three years ago. Captain John’s eyes seemed to brighten as he began his tale. Chapter Two When I Left Turkey |
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Domenic Pappalardo
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| | Subject: Re: AntiChrist's Reign; AntiChrist's Fall Sat Oct 19, 2013 3:33 pm | |
| You give away to much.
The first three lines: Building an oil pipe. Husbands real, and nick name. Wife just woke up. Husband is working between Asher and Tyer in Lebannon. Wifes' name is Jael, and there is a problem.
You need to hook the reader. Give the read just enough to make them want to read more to find out what is going on.
“They’ve started building the oil pipeline from the tribe of Asher in Lebanon to the city of Tyre.”
Jael looked up sleepily at her husband John Presley whom she had nicknamed Johnny boy was hovering over her with a concerned look on his face. She took a moment to gather her thoughts before replying:. |
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