First Chapter - King of Princes

Subject: First Chapter - King of Princes Mon Mar 01, 2010 5:40 pm

Hi Ann
I've revised x many times and now edited.
I have taken into account all the tips I've received on this forum and have also had considerable editorial help from my daughter-in-law who is English but teaches Maths and Physics in Italian. She is very proficient [SIC] in languages.
Please have a look and let me know if you think that the grammar and presentation is much better.

Subject: Re: First Chapter - King of Princes Mon Mar 01, 2010 6:24 pm

Excellent, Llew. The sentence structure and mechanics have the work flowing smoothly, now. You've put in a lot of hard work.

Ann First Chapter - King of Princes Icon_biggrin

Subject: Re: First Chapter - King of Princes Tue Mar 02, 2010 4:14 am

Hi Ann
Thanks for all your help and tips.
I have got a wonderful idea for my next book.
I had started a few others, but this new idea has 'swept me away'.
It will be 12 short stories under the main title of "Cyber Swine's"
Quite a topical subject, given the problems with Cyber Bullies etc.

Guest

luigie,

X is done, and it reads well. I would suggest you put it aside for a time. Go back and read it again...you may find changes you will want to make.

Domenic

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