I am a new author - new to trying to find representation, anyway - and would appreciate any feedback anyone's willing to give. Everything I have read thus far on query letters has referenced keeping it short, do not go into a lot of detail, and do not talk about yourself unless it directly pertains to your book or your personal marketability.
This is what I've used most recently:
For your consideration, I would like to submit my novel, Watchers of the Night, a compelling fantasy adventure.
“You don’t even know where you are, do you.” A statement, not a question.
Paul Bennett doesn’t realize that his sleep disorder is actually a gift that allows him to travel the night free of his body. That is, not until he is approached by a member of Astralis; an organization funded by the government that uses people with his talent to gather information for the greater good.
At Astralis, Paul finds inclusion and friendship on a level that he’d never before had the chance to experience and begins to believe that Astralis could provide a new life for him. It isn’t long, however, before he realizes that Astralis is an organization under siege from within. Paul finds
himself forced to either choose a side or leave Astralis forever.
Watchers is complete at 112,000 words. I have begun work on a second novel based around the same characters.
I would be pleased to send you any requested portion of the manuscript for review.
-name, phone, email, address, etc-