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Registration date : 2012-07-04

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PostSubject: Review my poem   Review my poem EmptyWed Jul 04, 2012 5:10 am

I shall walk a Thousand Miles ...

And I shall walk a thousand miles
The night be dark, the road not mine
For I have one bright spot in mind
And that is you, my love, my shine

Its burning hot, the Sun helps naught
But I need no bread, I need no shade
I look up to the soothing calm
The kiss of love, the touch of her arms
And I shall walk a thousand miles..

Its raining hard, the lightening roars
the thorns just make my spirits soar
The blood won’t make the journey long
The pain shall sweep away with her song
And yet she is far, a thousand miles!
But I move along, with limping files

The nature cried, So hard I tried
What makes you but go on and on?
If you had me asked, and I would have told
You can’t stop a man, who is out for his gold
And keep I walking a thousand miles,
for her earthly love, her heavenly smiles..
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Registration date : 2008-12-29
Location : Florida

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PostSubject: Re: Review my poem   Review my poem EmptySun Jul 15, 2012 6:52 pm

Who is the subject of your poem?
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PostSubject: Re: Review my poem   Review my poem EmptySun Jul 15, 2012 9:48 pm

There is no subject as such. Its just a poem about a man, trying to fight nature just to get to his love, waiting for him at home. If this is not what you asked for, I would request you to rephrase the question, since I did not get it.
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